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I would say everything Mrs. Keaton gave me was
useful advice for my paper. The advice helps me see my wrongful mistakes that
need to be corrected. I knew we couldn’t use first person in this paper, but I
did and I was reminded not to! I thought the advice about “How does some of the
things I choose to put in my paper relate to creativity in schools.” This made me think harder, to go back word
for word and really see if what I’m talking about even makes sense to the
reader. Also I was showed; I’m
supporting one side of the agreement, in my pictures which, we need to be
supporting both, one for and against my topic. Also another helpful piece of
advice was, everything in the picture is supposed to be what I’m analyzing, not
personal opinions on the pictures I choose. Also seeing the comment from Mrs. Keaton, “what
are the two sides,” helped me better understand I don’t know what my two sides
are, I just feel into a one side category.
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I wouldn’t say I got any information that was
least helpful from Mrs. Keaton. The only mistake I was aware of after I turned
my paper in, was my MLA heading was in 11 font, when it was supposed to be 12
font times new roman. But now that I was told that advice I will always be sure
to check my headings and make sure everything is the same before I send in my
paper, not after I send my paper in.
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I only have a couple of questions from Megan’s
comments. One of the questions would be if I analyze the picture and describe what
it means, or why it’s important than those would be personal reasons, when you
told me to analyze the paper without opinions? Also I’m just really confused with how do I, explain
the features from the picture which leads the reader to ideas without opinions.
? Can I change my pictures if I found two other pictures that explains my topic
much better than the ones I Found.?
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My plans for revision would be to basically feel
like I’m starting this whole writing process over. My plans are to revise, to not use any first person.
Change and add some more details that explain what creativity is. Have an argument
that supports two sides, instead of one side for my topic. Analyze much better
some of the features I am describing in my paper. I am going to make sure to
not use any opinions, and make sure I claim what the picture is arguing. Explain
how the features that lead the viewer to ideas I talked about. I am going to
make sure I have clearly two sides for my augment, and I am going to correct myself
while writing to make it seem more formal for the reader to read. I am going to take away any information that doesn’t
make sense to me, and correct it with valuable information that’s useful.
Good questions. In academic writing, readers expect authors to write "objectively" when, in fact, that is impossible. So, here is how you write to sound objective:
ReplyDelete1. Stay away from first person (at least when writing in school). Using first person implies that you are giving your own opinions.
2. Make sure that everything you say can be backed up by evidence from the reading. For the analysis, this means that every time you say that a feature of the picture means a particular thing, you back it up by explaining how the picture implies that analysis. So, if you say that the red in a picture implies anger, you might then explain that anger is also suggested in the expression of one of the characters (who happens to be wearing red). This would allow you to show that red, in that picture, means anger instead of love.
You may choose two new pictures if you want. Keep in mind that this essentially means starting over, which will cause you more work. But if you feel those new pictures would create a better paper, you may use new pictures