" Workshop Reflection"

Each member in my group gave me supportive and very helpful information towards my paper and writing.  Thank you!

Kendall: You need to change the topic towards bullying, or change the topic towards more my topic I I am trying to write about.

Abigail: I need to change or talk more about my topic. I need to find pictures on track for stereotypes in different social classes. You made really good points, but you need to find the positive and negative for a topic. Break it down and analyze the picture.

Andrew: Find an argument that contains the social class stereotypes. It doesn’t make sense, in way. Andrew also helped me find a new topic that was better for my understanding. I knew what I wanted to research just didn’t know how to put it!

2.  The most helpful piece of was about the way I was trying to explain my topic. I had really good view points of what I was trying to get across to the reader, but trying to put in terms with a picture and my topics was the most difficult. Thanks to each member in my group they helped me see a clear vision of what I really wanted to talk about so, after that I changed my topic for something that better suits my ability to write, read, and understand.

3. Really I didn’t get no information that was least helpful piece of advice; everything was very helpful and supportive. We all listen, and give each other helpful advice to better our writing. IF we didn’t give each other supportive helpful advice then it wouldn’t be a workshop ?  So everything was helpful to me nothing was least helpful. They all even built my courage to come up to the teacher, to change my topic that better helped me understand what I was doing.

4. My plans for revision are to sit down and take a couple days to work on this. I don’t want to finish this in a couple of hours and say I’m done. I want to really have patience with my writing, which I don’t have at all and take my time. I really want to understand fully not just a little bit of what my topic is going to be about, as well as my pictures. I want to correct my mistakes with grammar. I want to write this paper with very good detail so people can see my points I’m trying to make across to the reader.

The draft of Visual Analysis

Pricilla Mosiello

Megan Keaton          

English 112

26 February 2013

 

                                                            Visual Analysis

            The topic I will be discussing is on how schools can work to stop social class stereotypes. How can schools prevent people from judging or learning about a certain person, of culture without getting to really know themselves?  Stereotypes become created from the main sources which are schools, teachers, and textbooks.  If there is more open communication, and less judging in schools less stereotypes wouldn’t be created. You should get to know someone one, but that is hard when humans create a first impression in three seconds or less.  If all students went to school in the same uniform, there would be nothing to make fun of. If your parents paid for your school, and you go to public school you should learn the same studies. Going to school you should not be critsized for the way you walk, talk, and even the way you dress. In school we should be focused more on cultures backgrounds, and different varieties of people, then wasting time on wars, Hitler or Murtha Luther King.  People and wars are taught in school, which gives student’s thoughts and appeals right away that they carry on and use in real life. School is supposed to teach students to change as we grown and learn throughout life. We should not be taught anything in school that pertains to causing future stereotypes against certain people.  Serious attention needs to be focused on school work, and developing expressive ideas about each person’s own unique self.  There would be less judging in the school systems and more compromising together as a team then enemies.  In school students need to focus the attention on achieving, exceling, and preparing them for life. I have two pictures that relate to my topic social class stereotype in schools.  In the first picture the back ground is blank, there’s no theme but white. In my first picture I see a group of many students who are all different. There’s a bag hanging up with words on it but too far to see.  Each student is wearing their own style clothes that makes them show they each have their own individual style to life.  One of the girls is a cheerleader; the other is nerdy with classes. One of the students is heavy set, and one looks like a jock with the football team coat on. One looks very productive, the other male student looks angry at the world, one female looks like she’s in a uniform with a mysterious look on her face. One of the male students is a different face; he has head phones on with his arms crossed with a big smile across his face, looking very happy to be him. All these people in this picture are different but are next to each other for many reasons. There are different people who all end up coming from different states and counties to learn together for a brighter education, and future that’s come along with that to. I think the author put all these different students together to show when we look at the picture of different people from school, we see that right away we have these stereotype names we created, like prep, jock, nerd,. Now schools in this generation already automatically no these stereotype names that have been created over years throughout life. When walking down the hallways in our head, or whispering to a friend what we know from a person’s outside appearance in stereotyping. Many people need to come together in schools of different areas to stop the stereotyping. People don’t need to judge they need to get to know a person inside and outside to understand why a certain person talks, walks, or dresses the way he or she prefers.  The main idea is everyone is different, and schools need to start expanding personalities and different backgrounds of people then the unnecessary junk we learn that does not help us become better citizens in society.  In my next picture for different classes of schools stereotyping would be a group of students in a uniform. These students are still different races like my first picture. The students look very concerned and deep into learning.  All the students are dressed in the same varieties of colors such as green, brown, and white. The teacher is standing next to a student helping a girl. The teacher is dressed just like the students so it gives the students no reason to judge and pretray a certain idea about her in their heads. All students go to school dressed the same, it saves parents money and kids don’t have nothing to talk about just something to learn about. In my picture there is a classroom setting with small TV and white board full of a lesson the teacher just taught. In the classroom there’s also a chalkboard in the classroom to the left of where the students are sitting. When kids are walking down the halls all students are dressed the same. No students would be able to class someone in a category if they really don’t know. You can put someone in a social class stereotype in school by the same clothes, but you can if they were in a mixture of a Varity of clothes it would be different. I think if all students went to school to understand the true meaning of learning important educational learning there would be no social class stereotypes such as preppy, or nerdy, or jock in school systems.  I think my second picture is showing students in uniforms, doesn’t need to come from private school. It could come from all different kinds of social class schools to. If a student is engaged in the learning the same way all students around them are the same then it would draw more attention to having communication skills, and personalities then it has been with the different stereotypes that are all in different schools.  

 

 

"The picture with the key and word success analysis"

In the Picture I am analyzing a key laying on the words success. The paper looks torn around the edges, like it was cut out from a page of an article. There are not many features in this picture, because it’s a blank background, with the word success and a key. The key is not large and looks very old to me, the key looks like it belongs to unlock treasure chest. There is just the word success on a white solid background along with the key on top of the words. In the picture there’s nothing but the word success and the old key that looks like it fits into a lock. In the picture I feel like the key to success would be a good future. The key in the picture with the word success is trying to show that the key to nice things is success. I guess the key is trying to state that in life to have success is doing the right thing. I feel like the key and the word success also means, you can unlock the secret of success from a key of hard word. I think the main idea of this picture would be to have a good, nice well off, happy life, then walk through every hurtle with a new challenge, to unlock the  door of success. Everything is locked in life, and it’s up to a person to unlock the treasure of success. You don’t just wake up and become a super star, or have a great job; you earn what you have in life, through many ways of success. The key in life is to unlock the beauty of success is what this picture brings to my mind.

Self- Assessment Reflection

1.       My goal for this paper was to make connections with the articles I read. I wanted to use correct grammar, and not have run on sentences. I wanted to stay on subject and not put a whole bunch of words together in a sentence. I want the reader to fully understand my point of view as a writer. I think I reached my goals to a certain extent, because I kept rereading and checking for errors that I didn’t see before. I read every sentence again and again, until I corrected it to the right version.

 

2.       I used my time wisely and used class as a backbone to help myself become a better writer. I listen to other people opinions, and take notes when were in workshops, to come back to my paper for the errors I didn’t see with my own eyes. The use of my time fitted my goals because I made the time and put the effort towards my work to get it done. I reread and took the time to skim each sentence carefully.

 

 

3.       I didn’t really see my writing change, I seen more edits I had to do then an overall change. I feel my writing is basically the same unless I’m told to write in another style. I took advantage of my peers thoughts towards my paper because there seeing things that I may not, and I learn from them things I didn’t know before. I worked with my peers by communicating, telling the honest truth, and staying focused on each reading we heard.

4.       I would say my mother contributed to the paper because I had her read the paper out loud to me, to see if I heard anything out of place, or something that didn’t sound right. It helps me hear what I have to fix in someone else voice.

5.       I learned I need to fix and improve something’s to become a better writer.  I learned from my peers there different style of writing, and some really good ideas came in my head that I never thought of before until my peers have said it.

6.       My hardest part about writing this paper was how to properly follow the full directions of how to write my paper.  I really didn’t understand this style of writing because I’m not use to it. I really didn’t understand how to connect three articles together with questions and themes that came to me about the readings. I think the easiest part of writing this paper was explaining my ideas in questions and putting the readings into my own ideas and thoughts. I took risks trying to be different and follow the directions at the same time. Quoting and trying to explain my ideas in questions was the most risky for me.

7.       The most part I’m most proud of would be the middle of my paper because I feel like I came up with really strong questions that shocked myself when I reread over my paper. I feel like I really expressed the idea in the first paragraph well with quotes and questions of my own.

8.       I think some parts of my paper need improvement far as adding transitional words and parts of speech. Grammar is always a major concern to me and the way my paragraphs move smoothly enough to grasp a reader’s attention. I made these attempts by rereading and having people come check if I used grammar correctly. Also by editing what my peers told me to work on.

9.       I would say my writing process first consists of coming home and rereading the articles I thought was somewhat interesting and similar. Then I start to an note outside the paragraphs good quote, or underline ideas for my topic. Then I look back at my topic I have picked to see if the articles I picked are alike in some way. Then I open a blank word document and start typing everything that comes to mind on my topic. I print out my paper, reread, add and take away things that don’t make sense. Then I turn that into a paper edit and revise, and listen to people’s advice then look back over it again the next day with clean eyes. I reread again fix again and edit everything possible and try to get it for perfection but nothings perfect.

"Exploratory Proposal- Workshop Reflection"

1.       I received great advice from the members of my group :

ABBY: Told me to connect my questions more and combine the sentences together, and also add more commas. Also told me it was conversational. I had really good questions just needed to connect the pieces together more.

KENDALL: Told me something’s that would sound better to a reader instead of just saying rich but words to back it up like rich family.  It was good. I have to connect my pieces together.

ANDREW: Told me not much, but I think something about my grammar and structure of how I wrote the paper.

2.       I would say the most helpful piece of advice that helped me was knowing I was on the right track I just needed to connect my articles and sentences together as one thought instead of asking questions that pop in my head as I was reading the articles. Hearing I had good questions helped me feel proud of myself. Also some of my sentences didn’t make sense either.

3.       I would say I was confused a little when I was told to add more words and that the paper was conversational.  I really didn’t know what that meant?  Other than that all the feedback I receieved was helpful!

4.       My plans for revision is to first re read my paper to see if anything new pops out at me that I see just doesn’t make sense. Then I am going to rearrange some sentences, correct my grammar, add commas when necessary, and also take away some questions or details that just don’t belong in my paper.

 

"Exploratory Proposal"

 Perceptions/identities/ stereotype

 

“It’s no surprise that schools in wealthy communities are better than those in poor communities, or that they better prepare their students for desirable jobs.” (Anyon 1).  “President Bush emphasized his deep believe in our public schools, but even greater concern that too many of our neediest children are being left behind.” (Kasser 1 ).  Who classes schools as middle class and why?  Are schools not supposed to be treated equal so we all don’t grow up against each other, we should all grow up equal trying to better ourselves getting an education for our future.  Of course schools in upper class would do better they have the money and technology to advance students learning. But is it fair for students who don’t live in a wealthy community to not have the same advantages as other students living in a wealthy community. Should the rich community somewhat want to help the middle and lower class instead of being greedy to better educate students? Why are there different schools? Shouldn’t all schooling and education be the same, instead of different? My question is did people do statistics to find out how the poor kids and rich kids do in different school settings?  I want to know more about how student’s behaviors are different depending on the area they grow up in.  “As proposed in No Child Left Behind, States must allow students who attend a persistently dangerous school, or who are victims of violent crimes at school, transfer to a safe school.” (Kasser 2). What does it mean to have a safe school and a crime school? School is supposed to teach students to change as we grow and learn. Not feel like there in danger around people who committed crimes. How are there violent schools around, there should be no one with a dangerous background allowed on school premises. So does a safe school have high top security?  “The humanities are a foundation for getting along in the world, for thinking, for learning to reflect on the world instead of just reacting to whatever force is turned against you.” (Shorris 1). So people define and stereotype that the rich learn the humanities of life and the middle class don’t?  So if we don’t come from rich we won’t succeed and know as much as the rich, is that how there trying to put this? If you don’t come from rich, and go to a private school or university you don’t learn the humanities is that what the author is trying to put in terms of different people being brought up in different areas. Do rich students get left behind or is it only the lower class? Did the No child left behind act come out to try to help the neediest kids continue to have a chance at an education to better their lives? I feel like I didn’t grow up in a rich community and I still know the humanities of life. I didn’t grow up around the best schools in my life, but that doesn’t change who I am today. Just because some kids are richer and some kids are poorer as long as they’re going to a school, they should be taught about communication skills and world skills. In school teachers should push the issue to not judge anyone, were all different in our own ways for students to all come together as one, vs. being against each other with hate.  “However, the examples of schoolwork which follow will suggest characteristics of education in each social setting that appear to have theoretical and social significances and to be worth investigation in a larger number of schools. (Anyon 2). In “ Middle- class schools any works tasks done do not request creativity. Serious attention is ever given on school work on how the students develop or express their own feelings and ideas; self-expression was just done for fun. Why do teachers only have little bit of excitement for their students school work? Why do teachers not have much interest in feelings and interests about their students? Shouldn’t they want to help the students to do better in life? At an Executive Elite School in other words a higher class school, the students school work they do helps them achieve, to excel, and to prepare them for life. Now why don’t the middle class schools to the same as the upper class? Shouldn’t all schools be the same and not create a certain stereo type name such as “rich kids” Or “poor kids.”  By creating all these different names thought-out the years, students become more let down and discriminated to fail then to achieve. Why did the think of the No child left behind act? It had to come from somewhere why the students were failing grades at such a young age. It couldn’t have been the entire fault coming from the academic side of skills. Whenever there is a problem it is fully looked at before a student moves on, that’s how it should be for all students to be treated equal. “Such research could have as a product the further elucidation of complex but not readily apparent connections between everyday activity in schools and classrooms and the unequal structure of economic relationships in which we work and live in. (Anyon 10).  The research should of already been done, for the student being treated unequal. Shouldn’t there be a break in the chain of the same cycle in education? I want to know more about the perspective of students who came from a rich family vs. a poor side of the family. Students who grow up and go to school in a poor community will feel more undetermined to reach their goal, as to a rich person who has everything practically given to them in their hand. “There will be no excuses made for why we can’t push all of our children across the achievement gap over to the fertile side- and eventually to equality, shining in the sky.” (Darling 2). A quote like that should help visualize students achieving and meeting their goal no matter what circumstance they come from. If people have a criminal background that doesn’t mean they shouldn’t have another shot for education.  So if people make mistakes in life that means we have the right to judge them? Don’t people make mistakes and live to learn. We grow within the day and if we have an opportunity to grow and learn then what more could we ask for? There shouldn’t even be different social classes, such as Affluent, Executive, Middle class, Upper class; we were all born into the world the same way, so we should all educate our brains the same way.  Is it fair to have to go to a lower class school just because you came from lower class? Why can’t we make a change in the way surround ourselves near and start over? How will standardized assessments make schools stronger should schools be focused more on creativity then academic skills? If someone wants to become a dancer, or artist should we tell them no because you’re never going to make it coming from a poor community. Just because you or your parents can’t afford it, does that mean you can never have it?  We all come from different a background that is what makes us unique in different ways. So if more and more students are being put in a category of rich and poor, then what is society coming to now a days.  We all go to school together to try to better our lives in different ways or we wouldn’t be in the same classroom with each other, so then we should all work as team no matter what background you come from to help.  I want to know more about creativity in school, because that was never mentioned or brought up before in any of my classes before I came to English 112. I think creativity is the most important thing for a person to have because that helps define what that person is all about.  If creativity is killed in school then that’s like taking color out of a picture, and leaving it black and white.  Why is creativity not pushed as in issue in education?  Are taking tests and cramming our brain with unnecessary information we will not remember the next day important in the board of education’s eyes? Should students be pushed more to full fill their desire and dream job for their future? Would this help students be more motivated to want an education and go to school? If you’re rich you full fill your dreams and plus more because of you or your parents money, is that fair to the lower class? Like I said before students shouldn’t be left behind, just as much as students should try to be motivated to learn. I think if learning was more fun and had more creativity, then more students would be willing to want to go to school and explore what’s more to life than just the regular everyday school basics. Learn a few chapters, take a quiz, review and have an exam is not an interesting way to keep a student with full undivided attention. It just causes stress on people to push themselves to do better than to just give up and feel hopeless like no one cares.

                I want my research to be on the different classes of schools plus the stereotype names that come along with the different social classes in education from different people. I am interested in this topic because I did grow up going to upper class private schools or universities but that doesn’t change me for being me. I want to engage my learning at a new personal level for myself. I plan on beginning my research with books, books that have peoples own experiences and different outlooks on life coming from where they were brought up into, and what schools they went to. I want to read articles and opinions on schools.